Chapter Two was a great chapter, and I can see why it was so draining for you to write it. That sandstorm was great! I loved the little culture tidbits. Ok, next chapter now, yes?
I liked all of this, and especially the way you ended Chapter Two. The writing is excellent.
Love what I am seeing so far. Two steps forward…. Eight steps back. Just when you think that the trio was getting somewhere. Chapter Five kept me on the edge of my seat! Keep the chapters coming, can’t wait to see what will happen.
Ciradår is such an asshole, but quite an interesting character too, I am loving it so far! Like where one moment he is taking cheap shots at them being comfortable with their “lax standards” and the next he is stepping up to lead them through danger. But my gods these poor buggers are being put trough the wringer! The scene with the tail made my eyes water.
Seriously though, your writing is amazing and I really have no criticisms at all! It flowed well and didn’t have any strange breaks or didn’t have anything that was super confusing. I cannot wait to read more!
Cheyenne, also known as Iron Dragon, has been writing since a young age. She loves character-driven science fiction and fantasy stories that are epic in scope and complexity. She has a professional editing background and enjoys being a beta reader. She’s also completely obsessed with yarn! When she’s not writing or reading, Cheyenne dyes yarn, crochets, knits, plays video games, and enjoys nature photography. Visit her yarn shop at akairondragon.ca/yarn!
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